Introduction a horror fanatic
Hello! My name is Tabitha. I go by Tabi to the people who know me. I think Tabitha sounds like an older woman, so I shortened it for now and no, I cannot wiggle my nose like the daughter on Bewitched. Although, I do have blue eyes like her. Anyway, I am 25 years old. I transferred here after a few major changes. Going from a science degree to accounting took some time. I have been a senior a few years now. I make myself feel better by saying that I have two associate degrees. Accounting is something that has always been intriguing to me. It is interesting to me because accounting is like a huge difficult puzzle piece. Everything has its own place in accounting and it is my job to find it or fix the placement. I am currently going for my bachelors, then will get a job and work on my master’s degree in accounting. I have not picked a field yet, but I intend to before school ends for me. I am a huge horror genre fan. I also love thrillers and supernatural type sh...
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ReplyDeleteHi! I also read the original story recently. I really liked how you changed it. The storyline of the original story goes along very well with a more modern flare. I loved how this had a happy ending. I also liked how you kept the characters the same, but in a modern flare. In the original story, the characters were in poverty, but in you rendition, you made them "unpopular," so you kept the same category of character. Maybe you could add a summary of the original story in your Author's Note. Since I had read the story previously, I knew the story and what had happened, but I feel like someone who is not familiar with the original story may be a little confused. I also feel like adding a summary would allow the reader to see exactly what changes you made and make it easier to compare the two versions. I really like the layout of your website and I look forward to reading more stories. Great job.
ReplyDeleteHi! I really liked your modern twist on the story. I really enjoy romantic stories that end up as happily ever ever. I had not read the story previously and after reading it I really liked your version. I love that Sally's character was very quite, but Austin still took the time to notice her. This really shows that one day everyone will hopefully find their one true match even if they are a quiet person. Although that would probably be frustrating for Sally to have her dad not approve of her dating Austin it made their love story more interesting. I like how you changed it to Sally just sneaking behind her dad's back rather than her being taking her away from the boy. I think it would have been interesting if you had added more detail about the relationship between the dad and Austin once they meet. Overall, I really liked your story.
ReplyDeleteHey there. I was surfing around trying to find a new project to read and came across yours. I read your home page introduction and thought to myself, hey yeah, its October so I’ll take eithers some romance or a horror story. Immediately I was impressed with how well the opening sentences were written. You really were able to display what the setting was like, I could almost see it right in front of me! I liked your use of saying Sally was like a “unicorn” to Austin. Really puts in perspective how much Sally meant to him even initially. I liked how you gave Sally’s father some character. The way he is really made me think that he made Sally the way she was, secluded and such. I would say that it may be helpful to go ahead and delete one of the sentences that say the two met on campus. Also, I think that some more time on how the two flowered into wanting to marry would have been useful. In all it was a great and well written story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Tabitha! I'm so glad that you rewrote this story! I also read it a few weeks ago and I was upset with the ending. I hated that the princess' fate was set in stone and it didn't matter how faithful she was to her husband, she was still screwed. I definitely like your version much better! It reminds me of a book I read called "A Little Something Different." The only thing I noticed that you might want to check on is that, right near the beginning, some of your sentences can be a bit short and choppy. For example, in the first paragraph you say "Love is all around in Princeton town. The birds are chirping. The sun is out and there isn’t a frown in sight." It might flow better if you synthesize some of the shorter sentences. Also I noticed some inconsistencies in the tense, such as "Then there was Sally. Sally is a girl who you would normally see in the corner with her nose in a book or in the cafeteria by herself doing homework." Was, in the first sentence, is past tense and is, in the second sentence, is present. I noticed you switching back and forth a little. Overall it's a great story and I can't wait for you to write a horror one!
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